Descriptive Writing – 5 Anetter

Year 5 have been looking at ways to improve their narrative writing using descriptive language. Students were given an image and brainstormed words to describe this image. They then wrote a description of this image.

The dark, grey clouds formed over the majestic water. Everything was getting out of control and the dilapidated beach chairs flew away, snapped in pieces. Then there were petrified children’s screams. The sand turned black and even the adults were horrified to see a big gust of treacherous wind. 

Alexandra Nakhle

The bright piece of land was left abandoned. The eerie and concerning wave crashed onto the rusty, old boat. Nothing else was found but rotten and mouldy seaweed covering the discoloured boat. A slimy, wet and damp rock pool which seemed harmless with seeping moss, covered the large rocks. All that was left on the neglected beach was a little bridge which now had sunk into the depths of the sand. The handmade, dust-covered umbrella stood proudly on the splintered, broken pole. The eerily, silent waters never seemed to end but flowed into the steps of the unknown. 

Isla Choi

As I walked into the old, eerie, hair-raising forest, I was frightened as I stared at the tall curved trees. I started walking and heard a loud, frightening thump. I slowly, but carefully, walked towards the gigantic ear-breaking noise. I walked up to the sound and saw that a small, chirping baby bird had fallen from one of the large trees. As I was helping the tiny, pathetic thing, I looked around and saw a foggy, dirty gas coming towards me. I ran quickly, without catching a breath.

Sophia Mirarchi

Wendy Anetter
Year 5 Teacher